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I'm excited to be starting this class. I have lots of ideas, but have always been nervous about taking the first step in putting the words on paper, rather making those first few keystrokes. I hope that this blog will serve as a useful medium for me to share my ideas and get feedback that will help me to become a better writer and educator.

Tuesday, April 20, 2010

What If Exercises - Week of 4/19

VI: Plot


Exercise 30: Three by Three


Carter leaves Earth

Heir to power

Vanquishes his enemy


VII: Story Elements as a Given


Exercise 40: Pyscho: Creating Terror


I pulled the shower curtain open slightly and poked my head out. I could have sworn I heard a scratching on the door. With all the steam from my shower, I wasn’t so much looking as I was listening, but there was nothing there. I shrugged my shoulders and re-entered my own personal waterfall. Sometimes living by yourself can give you the creeps.


I stepped out of the water stream, grabbed the bottle of semi-translucent shampoo off the shelf and lathered my hair up, getting a good handful of suds. Turning around I let the water droplets bounce off my head and cascade down my shoulders and back. Odd, the water doesn’t feel quite as warm and it was a moment ago and now it had...a different feel. My eyes opened up and looked down, a scarlet colored substance all over the floor of the white basin. I knelt down and reached out my hand when I saw that there were red beads of the stuff on my arm. I lifted my fingers to my nose, the substance smelled vaguely like blood. That was when I turned my head and gazed at the horrific sight of red liquid pouring out from the shower head. Panic took over, I freaked out, I scrambled to get out of the shower. I slipped on the liquid hitting my head hard on the side of the fiberglass tub. I reached up and grabbed the curtain, trying to pull myself up and out, while the blood was spraying my chest I quickly noticed that it was rising in the tub. I raised myself off the floor of the tub only little ways when I heard the plastic tear and fell back into the blood, the shower hooks spun around the their rod, making little clinking noises.


The brass doorknob violently rattled back and forth, the white door shook in its doorframe, little chips of paint littering the floor and the counter nearby. A blinding florescent light filled the room from the gap under the door. As quick at it began, it all stopped. The door stopped rattling, the green light dissipated and the blood flow from the shower head ceased. I carefully got out of the tub and wrapped my towel around my waist and walked over to the door and timidly reached out for the doorknob. If I wasn’t freaked out enough already, the lights flickered and went out, my breath started to come in ragged gasps, I could feel the blood drain from my face and my head get dizzy with nervousness. The lights flickered back to life bathing the room in 100 watts of pure daylight. I let out a nervous laugh. I’m being ridiculous getting freaked out over nothing, but then how would I explain the shower of blood.


I started to turn the brass handle when I smelled a pungent aroma from behind that tickled my neck and wafted into my nose. I looked out of the corner of my eye into the mirror, still streaked with steam. Oh shit.

2 comments:

  1. Ah yes, blood suddenly coming out of the shower head - awesome. This totally reminded me of the classic scene in Ghostbusters where the gal is giving Oscar a bath, and the clear suddenly turns to thick, pink slime. Classic.

    Although I did not similarly focus on the "Psycho: Creating Terror" exercise, I want to pick your brain now that you got me thinking about how the classically famous Hitchcockian scene from "Psycho" may compare / contrast with more contemporary "torture porn" horror scenarios such as "Saw 1 - 900," "Hostel," etc.

    Basically, do you think that the majority of students have even seen / are familiar with the classic Hitchcockian horror "formula" which I feel that this exercise presupposes? Or do you think their thinking would immediately default to the contemporary "torture porn" horror formula, causing them to crank out some ridiculous story about how they are locked in their own bathroom and tortured & taunted for voyeuristic titillation? What do you think? Are students more familiar with the Hitchcockian or "torture porn" literacy of horror? And how do you think your response to this question implicates the potential usability of this writing exercise?

    Awesome work. And you better get that shower of yours looked at, son.

    See you on Tuesday.

    -Rick Filipkowski

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  2. Hi Jeremy,

    Of course I was reminded of 'Carrie'; with a 'Psycho' twist not Janet Leigh or Jamie Lee Curtis' but we have Jeremy behind the shower curtain; but without the back story that interests me. What quizzes me is the stressed out 'psychological' context which you have related to in our workgroup, that invokes these vivid, and horrific images you represent well in your stories that reflect your unique experience(I recall an earlier one with a lot of grotesque green in it...I will query you more about Tuesday) see you

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